Poetry By Heart | In Parenthesis – Part 7, pages 183-186

4. You can use an exclamation point with italics to show shock or incredulity.

In Parenthesis – Part 7, pages 183-186

"The huntsman's horn, that wakens echoes. Cf. Milton again: -

''Oft listening how the hounds and horn
Cheerly rouse the slumbering morn,
From the side of some hoar hill
Through the high wood echoing shrill.'' - [L]'Allegro, 53."

Theuseof understatement allows you to show a kind of respect for yourreader'sunderstanding.

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In the climax of David Jones' epic prose-poem , the protagonist John Ball attacks Mametz Wood, along with his unit, on the morning of the first day of the Battle of the Somme, July 1, 1916. As he goes forward, he watches as most of his fellows around him are ripped apart, but Ball somehow makes it through unscathed until that evening. When ordered to take part in a subsequent, follow-up attack, Ball is knocked down, hit in the legs by machinegun fire, and begins his long crawl back. Along the way he discards most of his equipment (except for his gas mask, which he thinks might come in handy). However, has special meaning: as any soldier knows, a warrior and his weapon are one: it defines who he is, lose it and he loses his identity. As he retreats, Ball carries on a conversation with himself: should he leave ? He hears the voices of his drill instructors driving home the importance of care of arms, the individuality of each soldier's weapon, the intimacy that he should share with it. In , mortally wounded Roland tries to break his sword against a stone, but cannot, so instead tucks it under his body and dies. So at last, John Ball relinquishes the symbol of his soldierly identity, , and must "leave it—under the oak."


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3. Even in literary or dialog writing, over-use of the exclamation point should be avoided, using alternative wording or other punctuation marks to express emotion. Experienced writers know how to make their readers infer emotions from context.
Avoid:
[Exaggerated enthusiasm using too many exclamation points]

Consider:
[Subtle enthusiasm using alternative wording with periods instead of exclamation points]

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Jones also writes that 'none of the characters in this writing are real persons' (ix), and this too might be misleading. The narrative is fictionalized. Jones's 15th Battalion becomes the imaginary 55th. With only a few exceptions, moreover, characters are not called by their actual names (6). Throughout almost all of the poem, for example, John Ball stands in for David Jones. Ball has Jones's experiences and, like Jones, Ball is clumsy, 'a parade's despair' (xv). After Ball, the poem's important narrative reflectors are Private Aneirin Lewis and Lieutenant Piers Dorian Isambard Jenkins. Together they combine to epitomize the battalion's dual Welsh-and-English character. I once asked Jones whether Aneirin Lewis, with his thorough knowledge of Welsh tradition, is a real person. 'Yes,' said Jones, 'as with other characters, a combination of people: he may have been Aneirin Evans and Cadwaladr Lewis.' Likewise, Lte. Jenkins represents a combination of prototypes. In a letter to Colin Hughes, Jones writes that one prototype was 'an attractive man, very absent minded, and also fair-haired like the squire for the Rout of San Romano' to whom he is likened in the poem, but without "the 'elegance' intended to be implied by my choice of the names Piers, Dorian, Isambard." (7). The prototype of Jenkins is also the prototype of Talbot Rhys, who is Jenkins's friend in the poem, and who is killed in the raid in Part 5. The raid corresponds to an actual raid in which the prototype of Rhys and of Jenkins actually was killed. The other model for Jenkins is an officer who fell during the assault immediately in front of Jones soon after leaving the assault trench and not, like Jenkins in the poem, close to the edge of the wood (8). Other figures, like Colonel Dell, 'Aunty Bembridge', and Signaller Olivier, are based on single prototypes whose names alone have been changed.

In Parenthesis by David Jones - Goodreads



A puff of Time, - time as time’s bluff is seen, -
sees Life Time’s capsule in parenthesis.
The stuff of life an empty stuffing, gene, -
transfer template, tomorrow’s synthesis.
Yet who returns for encore ex-machine?